Subject: Introducing Yourself to Your Instructor
My name is Amit Vaidya. I am from India. I am in my first semester of senior year in Civil Engineering at Clemson University, SC. In this memo, I am going to tell you little bit about my background, interests, achievements and my goals.
I was born in a small village called Bilimora. Bilimora is located about 70 kilometers south of the city of Surat which is 8th largest city in India, in the state of Gujarat. I spent my first 16 years of life in Bilimora. Bilimora is famous for temples, textile mills.
My everyday activities included going to school, playing cricket, watching television, and going to temple at the night time.
I spend my first 16 year of life in Bilimora before moving here in Greenville, SC on August 23, 2002 with my family. I started going to South Side Highschool as a sophomore and was enrolled in ESL program for a year. At South Side, I focused on achieving my goals including learning English language, participating in extracurricular activities, and doing well in all my classes. In my junior year, I had joined Math club, Robotics club and also enrolled in few honor classes. Along with school, I also found a part time job at a local restaurant to help my parents financially. Moving in to a new country and settling there (here) was a huge challenge for me and my family.
I like playing Chess and Cricket. I
always enjoyed reading, writing and doing math. Growing up as a child and until now, (my adulthood) it has been mine (my) and my parents dream for me to become a Doctor or an Engineer.
----- I decided to become a Civil Engineer because I have always been fascinated by looking at the bridges, buildings, and skyscrapers.
------I decided to become a Civil Engineer because I am always fascinated by looking at the bridges, roads, and skyscrapers.
A degree in Civil Engineering enables me to achieve my goals and also gives me an opportunity to make a difference in the community.
I have achieved many different goals in life. Some of my achievements are bigger than the others, which has given me greater satisfaction. The top five achievements that gave me the greatest personal satisfaction includes:
1. Being student of the month in my English class
2. Getting my first job
3. Going to college
4. Learning English language
5. Getting my driver's license
My achievements have helped me to get ahead in life.
I hope to get better at technical communication this term. Five years from now, I want to become a project manager of a construction project, and technical communication is one of the most important skills that a project manager should have. As a project manager, my primary goals are managing people, set budgets, and making decisions of all kinds.
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My name is Amit Vaidya. I am from India. I am in the first semester of my senior year studying Civil Engineering at Clemson University, SC. This sentence makes me a little dizzy with all of the prepositions. You might want to break in into two sentences . . . one telling what you are studying and the other where.I'd like to tell you a little bit about my background, interests, achievements you need a comma here to keep it consistent with the rest of your writing and my goals.
Bilimora is famous for temples,take out the comma and add the word "and" textile mills.
I started going to South Side Highschool high school should be two words) as a sophomore and was enrolled in put either "the" or "an" here ESL program for a year.
Moving in to a new country and was a huge challenge for me and my family.
I like playing Chess and Cricket you don't need to capitalize either chess or cricket. I enjoy reading, writing and doing math.
Growing up as a child and until now, (my adulthood) it has been mine (my) and my parents dream for me to become a Doctor or an Engineer. This sentence is awkward. You might want to reword it to something like: Since I was a child, my parents and I have shared the dream of my becoming a doctor or an engineer.
----- I decided to become a Civil Engineer because I have always been fascinated by bridges, buildings, and skyscrapers.
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I'll give my ideas to help, along with Eric's ideas.
Here is an idea for this sentence: I spent my first 16 years of life in this city, which is famous for both its temples and its textile mills.
...watching television, and going to temple at night .
While growing up, and even now, it has been my and my parents' dream that I would become a Doctor or an Engineer.
Some of my achievements are bigger than the others, but they all have given me great satisfaction.
Very impressive!! Good luck. :)
first 16 years of my life I spent in
Actually, Quaker_75, "I spent my first 16 years of life" is correct. Your correction introduced an error. In English, the subject comes first in a statement, unless it is preceded by a subordinate clause or the object and subject have been deliberately reversed for a special effect. In this sentence, "I" is the subject, "spent," is the verb, and "first 16 years of my life" is the object.
Subject-Verb-Object is the standard structure.
If I were you, firstly I will think of which one aspect of yourself can mostly attract your Instructor.Then you can emphasize that aspect ,while others you don't need to spend lots of time.
Good luck :-)
The titular prompt can be asked in many areas within the college application process—it may be a scholarship essay or interview, come up in a college interview, or even appear as an icebreaker for visits or orientations. Some students dread this question and freeze up as they scramble to produce an answer. Other students are all too happy to talk about themselves and ramble on and on. A middle ground answer is preferable.
Tailor the Answer to the Situation
Different scenarios might call for different answers. If you’re at orientation with fellow students, you might list your favorite movies or TV shows you’re into, but those likely shouldn’t be your go-to description of yourself if you’re interviewing with someone offering you a mechanical engineering major scholarship.
If you’re interviewing with the college, find an answer that relates to what you hope to study there. If you’re a marine biology major, for example, maybe your answer might revolve around your passion for the oceanic environmental protection and your ultimate goal of being a NOAA scientist. Or if you’re a computer science major, talk about clubs, competitions, or passion-projects you’ve done in the past. The point is: make it relevant to the school and your studies.
If filling out a scholarship application that’s awarded to students who are involved with the community, talk about your volunteering experience or how helping people in need makes you happy. What is the scholarship about? How do you relate to it? Start piecing together an answer from that information.
Passion, Hobbies, Activities, Etc.
If you’re being asked this question, it means whoever is doing the asking wants to get to know you. Sometimes it feels that the college application process boils down to numbers and data, so the chance to put a little humanity back into it can be both exciting and relieving.
So how do you talk about what makes you you? Think of things that you’re passionate about—equality, cinematography in movies, the environment, debating, world events, the history of East Asia, etc—it can really be anything. Bonus points if your passion is what drives you to attend that particular school.
Hobbies are also a big part of who you are. What do you do in your free time? While “napping” might be your answer, it may not fit best in these situations. Do you like to draw? Read? Play community sports? Volunteer? Build robots? LARP? Passion and hobbies are often closely linked.
School isn’t all classes and tests. Many students are involved in a ton of extracurricular activities—so talk about them! Did you start a school book club? Have you been in choir since kindergarten? Did you have a track meet and a mock trial debate in the same weekend? Talk about what you’re involved in, what you enjoy about these extra activities. What you do reflects who you are, or at least an aspect of who you are.
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